This was great. Mysterious bad guys, action, lots of TK usage and using Molly as leverage against Mohinder. Oh and non-con (which is sick to like, I know) so, so far so good. Great premise, I loved Sylar's general bad-assedness.
Two things though:
*"“I’ll rephrase that: what do you want me to do so Molly will … be ok?”- you've put what I'm guessing is Mohinder's line in the same paragraph that Sylar spoke. So that kinda confused me a bit.
*"even you won’t sink this low …”
" “Wouldn’t I?”
I'm no English teacher (and an Israeli to boot) but if you use "wouldn't" in the answer, shouldn't you use "wouldn't" instead of "won't" in the question?
Now that I'm done nit picking, I loved the Mohinder-Sylar dialogue, it rang true and that last bit between them was pretty hot.
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Date: 2007-08-09 09:28 pm (UTC)Two things though:
*"“I’ll rephrase that: what do you want me to do so Molly will … be ok?”- you've put what I'm guessing is Mohinder's line in the same paragraph that Sylar spoke. So that kinda confused me a bit.
*"even you won’t sink this low …”
" “Wouldn’t I?”
I'm no English teacher (and an Israeli to boot) but if you use "wouldn't" in the answer, shouldn't you use "wouldn't" instead of "won't" in the question?
Now that I'm done nit picking, I loved the Mohinder-Sylar dialogue, it rang true and that last bit between them was pretty hot.